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Have you ever thought about what can improve in your own neighborhood? I have been in the same neighborhood for 23 years and counting. In the city of Fall River, everything is always changing and yet some things remain exactly the same. I have seen many changes reflect in my community and would love to see more improvements such as cleaning, and fixing fixtures and the road at the local community park. I propose our city council arrange some funds to fix the area.
In my neighborhood there is a park down the road which could be a great place for families to gather and enjoy on a beautiful day, unfortunately the park is filthy. The fencing is coming apart, there is grafitti on everything including the large rock at the enterance. The equiptment is outdated but still safe to use. The community does its best at cleaning the area but the trash still lingers around like a seagull looking for food at the beach.
Not only is the park dirty and there is litter all over. The roads are full of cracks and holes and the sidewalks are raised and weeds are growing from beneath.
At one point this park was clean and well taken care of. I as a child would walk there with my siblings after my older brothers baseball game to enjoy the swings and monkey bars or just simply running around and playing tag with our neighborhood friends.
Parks have many benefits to our neighborhood children such as provide a safe and clean area to explore nature and play with their family and friends. More benefits a park has to offer is to give the children a place to express there imagination. Playgrounds also promote healthy lifestyle and being fit. “When kids are playing, they are learning reflexes and movement control, developing fine and gross motor skills and increasing flexibility and balancing skills. On top of that, when kids are involved in physical activity, they’re building stronger muscles and improving bone density, improving heart and lung function and preventing obesity, diabetes and high cholesterol.”( IPEMA, “Voice of Play”)

As a person of the community I would update this playground and the surrounding road and sidewalk to better provide a safe place for our community a place where they don’t have to clean and worry about their child getting into things they should not be. Our city council would be able to make room in budget through funding. “Being outdoors is one of the strongest correlates of physical activity in children. Playgrounds are spaces especially designed to enable and foster physical activity in children.” (Z Gesundh Wiss. 2017; 25(6): 661–669.)

Work Cited

https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC5681976/

Benefits of Play

I like the organization of your essay and believe you clearly established a problem such as road work. Your thesis is clear and appears to deem appropriate for your essay.
Questions. I agree with your reasoning in your unified and focused paragraphs. Your essay is appropriate for MLA 8 guide lines

Have you ever thought about what can improve in your own neighborhood? I have been in the same neighborhood for 23 years and counting. I have seen many changes reflect in my community and would love to see more improvements especially at the community park.
In my neighborhood there is a park down the road which could be a great place for families to gather and enjoy on a beautiful day, unfortunately the park is filthy. The fencing is coming apart, there is grafitti on everything including the large rock at the enterance. The equiptment is outdated but still safe to use. The community does its best at cleaning the area but the trash still lingers around like a seagull looking for food at the beach.
Not only is the park dirty and there is litter all over. The roads are full of cracks and holes and the sidewalks are raised and weeds are growing from beneath.
At one point this park was clean and well taken care of. I as a child would walk there with my siblings after my older brothers baseball game to enjoy the swings and monkey bars or just simply running around and playing tag with our neighborhood friends.
As a person of the community I would update this playground and the surrounding road and sidewalk to better provide a safe place for our community a place where they dont have to clean and worry about their child getting into things they should not be. “Being outdoors is one of the strongest correlates of physical activity in children. Playgrounds are spaces especially designed to enable and foster physical activity in children.” (Z Gesundh Wiss. 2017; 25(6): 661–669.)

Work Cited

https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC5681976/

When you picture a childhood memory where is it? Most can think of a time when they were young at a local park. There are swing sets, seesaws, monkey bars, and slides. Playgrounds offer children many things just from playing. Each piece of playground serves a purpose.
At the local playground children can experience overcoming of a fear, for example a child may be scared of heights but after seeing other children at play and exploring and more interaction that child can overcome the fear of heights and gain confidence while doing so and will eventually learn how to conquer goals.
Some families can find the parks to be dangerous and nerve wracking. As a parent there is nothing more rewarding then seeing your child explore and learn new things. At a playground your child learns how to connect with nature, learn how to fall and get back up, learn how to wait a turn because someone is using the slide first. For example climbing to the top of the slide gives a child a confidence and accomplished feeling.
Children are our most prized possesion and not only are they our greatest joy they are will be our mirror image in the future the next to lead the world. The playground helps shape them. Children are free to express themselves and their knowledge grows. The park attributes to many things such as strengthen o their imagination but also creates friendships, where children can engage and learn how to interact with others. “A visit to the playground is more than fun. It lets kids exercise their bodies, brains, and social skills. It also gives them a chance for unstructured, free play that’s important for healthy development.” (Playground Safety By: Julie Gilchrist, MD, FAAP)
Work Cited

Findings By JOHN TIERNEY JULY 18, 2011
This article explains the importance of which the playground shapes a child.
Excerpted from Play, Development, and Early Education by Johnson, Christie and Wardle
http://time.com/4928925/secret-power-play/

The Power of Play by Siobhan O’Connor
http://www.communityplaythings.com/resources/articles/2010/outdoor-play

Playground Safety By: Julie Gilchrist, MD, FAAP
https://www.healthychildren.org/English/safety-prevention/at-play/Pages/Safety-on-the-Playground.aspx
The value of (pre)school playgrounds for children’s physical activity level: a systematic review by: Karen Broekhuizen, Anne-Marie Scholten and Sanne I de Vries
https://ijbnpa.biomedcentral.com/articles/10.1186/1479-5868-11-59

While reading your annotated bib I find your annotated bibliography to be great, organized, and full of information and your sources seem to connect perfectly with your topic. I like how you added some information to back up your quotes example: The CDC website. Your in-text citations appear to be used correctly according to MLA guidelines as well.

What playground features are especially engaging for children?
Excerpted from Play, Development, and Early Education by Johnson, Christie and Wardle
http://time.com/4928925/secret-power-play/
The Power of Play by Siobhan O’Connor
http://www.communityplaythings.com/resources/articles/2010/outdoor-play
Playgrounds offer children many things such as knowledge of nature, brain strenghtening activities, and fun playful activities. Each piece of the playground serves a purpose. Children are free to express themselves and their knowledge grows. not only a strengthen of imagination but also creates friendships, where children can engage and interact.
At a playground children of all ages are free to explore nature and use their imagination. “A good playground must have playhouses, forts, and other structures that children can change, adapt, reconfigure, impose their own meaning on, and use to expand their imagination. These structures encourage rich sociodramatic play; further, they are an ideal place for the playground to reflect the cultures of the children who use it.”(pp. 1) by Johnson, Christie, Wardle.
Children can be seen running around, jumping, and going down the slide all while interacting and engaging with other children. Children are learning how to take risks. For example, a child may be afraid to do certain activities such as a swing alone however, at a playground a child may experience challenging themselves. Excercise is a main necessity in a childs life, a playground offers to keep children active by running around back and forth between playground activities.

Have you ever noticed why the layout of the store is the way that it is? Shopping can be a difficult task and having to maneuver a store while balancing a list and possibly children while trying to beat the clock to get home, you may have thought it was a in and out process. After careful observation and scientific research by Malcolm Gladwell he had posted a article “The Science of Shopping” which touches base on the mechanism of shopping. Walmart is one of the many stores that can end up being over a hour long shopping trip due to the stores layout.
Walmart is the store that I least shop at not because I would rather shop at Target but because of the moment you enter the parking lot you’re already feeling the rush to move faster as your battling the fast walking pedestrians and those vehicles that want a spot in the front. As you make your way to enter the store you’re immediately greeted by a associate that my daughter deems as a hero because they hand her stickers and in a chippy voice tell her to enjoy her shopping trip. As you pass the rather eccentric associate you are immediately greeted discounted display items with deals with the product below, items you don’t need but a sale you don’t want to miss.
Although I tend to always come to Walmart prepared with a list of what I need. For this shopping trip I only needed to purchase chicken. As I made my way through the middle of the store I couldnt help but stop in one of my favorite locations, apparel, as I browse through the clothes I listen in to another customer discussing with her friends on how badly she needed the bright colored pajamas that had Disney characters on it because she had a upcoming trip to Disneyworld next year. Her friends had tried to talk her out of it as her trip is over 4 months away, the girl had her mind made up as Disney items are seasonal and were on sale. As I made my way to the register after choosing the chicken I needed I was that same girl who put the pajamas in her carraige had also stopped to see the Disney display of movies by the cash register and she again looked to her friends to discuss the up coming trip while tossing the Disney products into her carraige.
According to Paco Underhill in “The Science of Shopping” all major departments such as meat, dairy, and produce are seperated and in between are filled with miscellanious items so that when a customer is shopping and the more time they walk around and browse things they arent there for the more they buy. “For this reason, a supermarket will often put dairy products on one side, meat at the back, and fresh produce on the other side, so hat the typical shopper can’t just do a drive-by but has to make an entire circuit of the store, and be tempted to by everything the supermarket has to offer.” (p68).

 

“For this reason, a supermarket will often put dairy products on one side, meat at the back, and fresh produce on the other side, so hat the typical shopper can’t just do a drive-by but has to make an entire circuit of the store, and be tempted to by everything the supermarket has to offer.” by Malcolm Gladwell (p68).

I really liked this piece as far as information and how easy it was to read. I really like the detail you have for example “children are drawn to mesh bags of beach toys and brightly colored pool floats in the shoes of pizza and flamingos.” I find this to be an exceptional piece and I am not a professional writer but I find there is nothing else you can expand on as your writing has answered all of the requirements asked.

The large off white apartment building with green wooden window panels and a fully primed yard is my home as it has been the house my grandparents owned while my father was young. I have been to this house my whole life and even stayed here most weekends. This house has given me many memories. My home has seen me at my most fragile state, and yet my strongest. For this house, I am home.
My favorite memory is helping my grandmother garden and tend to her grapevine thats in the backyard. My grandmother and I were always up to something during the summer time we were always outside unless the weather permitted. She taught me how to hand wash and dry clothes on the clothsline, how to water her variety of pink flowers that lined the side of her garage and when to pick the grapes off the grapevine. I loved the taste of the fresh purple seeded grapes that we would pick together after she washed them.
I remember my first pink Barbie bike with the training wheels and riding up and down the driveway until I advised I didn’t need the training wheels anymore and from that moment on I was learning how to rollerblade. Rollerblading in the driveway was hard my grandma handed me two kinds of rollerblades a dark blue pair with 4 wheels that my father owned at one point and the bright green rollerblades with just three wheels that she bought me. She always watched me while she would broom the leaves or dirt from the driveway. I loved to make my grandmother proud of me any chance I got. For example, I bought my first car with the money I saved over time. Although it was a flashy teal 1994 Ford Mustang. I remember after I registered my car my grandparents house was the first destination I wanted to go. I loved pulling into that driveway and being greeted with the worlds brightest smile.
When I lived upstairs above my grandparents as a toddler, my room was painted pink and the ceiling fan was a gift to my parents from their wedding. I spent a lot of time learning how to walk and talk. I took my first steps in the living room downstairs at my grandparents as my mother and my siblings spent a lot of time with them while my biological father worked or wasn’t around.
I had some of my strongest points and my weakest points in this house. My Grandmother was diagnosed with dementia and as it progressed at a high rate of speed. I have made the decision to help care for her. As a new mother with a daughter who was less than one years old I had moved to the same second floor apartment that I had lived in at her age to take care of the woman who has always taken care of me. My daughter, Ariana, who sleeps in the same timeless room I did, has had her first steps, her first words, and is learning more and more as the days pass. She was able to do some of the same things I have done at her age at the same house and driveway as I did.
As the year has passed my grandmother had rapidly gotten worse with dementia and ultimately had passed away in her home with my grandfather holding her hands and her two sons, and her only three grandchildren by her side. This home has seen every moment whether it was cooking, cleaning, birth, illness and death. This home has also seen strength, courage, tears, and unity. This house will continue to grow with me and my daughter and all the rest of our milestones ahead. Much like the growing grapevine, This house has seen me grow as a person and continues to.

If I could shop for a living I would. I actually spend most of my days shopping and buying things that are not on my list and leaving the store without the things on my list. Shopping is a difficult task, not just for myself but for others as well.
Walmart. Walmart is the store that I least shop not because I would rather shop at Target but because of the moment you enter the parking lot you’re already feeling the rush to move faster. As you enter the store you’re immediately greeted by a associate that my daughter deems as a hero because they pass stickers. If you look to the right you see a bunch of display items with deals with the product below.
I walked toward my one of my few destinations and during the walk I couldnt help but listen in to another customer discussing with her friends on how badly she needed the bright colored pajamas that had Disney characters on it because she had a upcoming trip to Disneyworld next year. That same girl who put the pajamas in her carraige had also stopped to see the Disney display of movies and she again looked to her friends to discuss the up coming trip.
When I come to Walmart the lights are always bright but everything looks to gloomy, but the advertisment boards are always so bright. As I make my way to the dairy area I make a pit stop at miscilanious aisles for example, home goods. It takes me a while after I start browsing and make my way to the destination. According to Paco Underhill in “The Science of Shopping” all major departments such as meat, dairy, and produce are seperated and in between are filled with miscellanious items so that when a customer is shopping and the more time they walk around and browse things they arent there for the more they buy.